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Old 11-11-2009, 09:29 PM   #1
NCL347
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you mend my heart.. (title for the moment.. but i dont think it works)

you mend my heart.

she walks in,
tears of anger run down her stoney face,
she throws her bag in frustration,
and screems to release the beast inside.

she stands there,
the tears dint stop running,
she looks over to her bag,
the picture has smashed.

her tears turn to those of sadness,
as it broke her heart that instant,
she's reduced to a ball of tears,
in need of her teddy's asisstance,

she looks up,
a hand is out streached towards her,
she takes it and it pulled to her feet,
she cant see past the blur of her tears.

but she feels the hand against her cheeck,
it dries her tears,
and she sees a smiling face,
it's so close, thier lips touch,
and her heart is mended.




i could call a daisy a rose,
i could even paint it to look like a rose,
but it still wont be a rose,
for a daisy is a daisy,
and a rose is a rose.


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Old 12-11-2009, 08:30 PM   #2
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i like that it has a happy ending. there were some grammar issues but i liked it.

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