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Old 31-08-2008, 12:01 PM   #1
GirlWithTheBrokenSmile
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Triggering (Suicide) - Deterioration

Hey long time no post so heres one of my latest poems, would be grateful of any comments =) Thanks xox

Deterioration

Pain, flowing through my arteries,
It canes, stabbing at the heart of me,
Trapped, never to be seen,
Screaming, begging to be free,

Release, that is what I need,
Please, someone rescue me,
Filling up with agony,
Eating away inside of me,

I can’t handle all this pain,
It’s driving me insane,
Getting stronger by the day,
Wasting my life away,

At night, I cry myself to sleep,
At breakfast, I won’t eat,
In the day, I’ll barely speak,
In the evening, I am weak,

Black eyeliner frames my eyes,
Baggy clothes are my disguise,
Never let seen the fat it hides,
Hidden beneath with the other lies.

The cuts, the burns, the bruises too,
The tears never to be seen by you,
The thoughts, I have of suicide,
The way I picture the way I die,
The razors that never leave my bag,
The ones you never knew I had,
The stash of pills inside my purse,
Wonder which would do the worst?
Never mind just take the lot,
Nothing to loose, so hell, why not?
Downed them all with vodka – straight
Now all there is to do is wait…



So Kill me with the love you never gave...
Scarlet tissues and empty pill packs,
she lay there motionless, theres no going back.....


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Old 31-08-2008, 12:07 PM   #2
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Thats written really well hun, its so powerful! I really liked it
*hugs* I hope your doing ok.



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Old 02-09-2008, 10:59 AM   #3
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=) glad you like, thx for commenting xox



So Kill me with the love you never gave...
Scarlet tissues and empty pill packs,
she lay there motionless, theres no going back.....


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Old 03-09-2008, 12:32 PM   #4
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Wow, that was an incredibly moving & powerful poem. Very well written. x

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