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Old 22-03-2008, 11:08 AM   #1
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Triggering (SI) - Poem - Fashion Trend.

A Fashion Trend.

You'll always be a super model,
Looking out those vacant eyes,
They'll say "she's caught up in the trend,
But she will never die."

And everything about her
Will be crystallized in glass,
Her transparent beauty,
As they know,
Will never last.

The fragile beads are falling
From around her pale wrists,
Her smile begins to waver,
With all this painful bliss.

Crimson marks her story,
And the roses by the dozen,
They'll say "she's just a fashion trend,
Stolen by a tragic end."

-Aimee.

[I wrote this after a nurse told me self harm was "fashionable".

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Old 22-03-2008, 11:19 AM   #2
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Wow.....Its fantastic....
And beautiful imagery too.
Loved it



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Old 22-03-2008, 02:24 PM   #3
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It’s really good and very well written. It has a lot emotion in it. Well done. Xx






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Old 22-03-2008, 03:20 PM   #4
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i like the rhyming, espeically the last two lines. doesn't overpower the writing.
great images too.



everything's coming up roses.

no more fear. no more fear!


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Old 23-03-2008, 03:13 AM   #5
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Wow, that was a great read.
Amazing imagery... and the tone & everything.
Nice work =)



- Anais Nin


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Old 23-03-2008, 05:36 PM   #6
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I adore this.
I especially love the second and third stanzas.
incredible imagery.
this is just beautiful.

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Old 23-03-2008, 05:42 PM   #7
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This was amazing.

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Old 24-03-2008, 02:25 AM   #8
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Brilliant poem.
It's sad that fashion can be so tragic.
And it's also not true, in my mind anyway, that self harm is a fashion trend. It was really insensitive of the nurse to say that.
Take care xx

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