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Old 12-03-2008, 08:38 PM   #1
little mermaid
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Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: never never land.
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not entirely sure about this one.

your attention tastes like sunshine,
thats what i remember most
and how pretty you looked with my words
spilled all over you
we never cared much about the mess.
i've been lead to believe there is no place in the summer
for my fingers
but your curls
but now the sun is coming back
and your entwined
with other girls
who i'm sure can't appreciate
the brilliance of your bed sheets
with our names magic markered
on the seams.
there is something so lonely
about my crazy-lady bathrobe
when you're not tugging on the tie.




Blessing all the birds that died so I could live
be a woman, be a woman


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Old 12-03-2008, 09:11 PM   #2
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you write really well, this poem is beautiful. i love the first two lines the most, because i know that feeling...



Change has a considerable psychological impact on the human mind.
To the fearful it is threatening because it means that things may get worse.
To the confident it is inspiring because the challenge exists to make things better.
To the hopeful it is encouraging because things may get better.


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Old 12-03-2008, 09:20 PM   #3
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aww this is really loverly sweetie
*cuddles tight*

take care hun
much love
katy
xx



You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are.


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Old 13-03-2008, 01:17 AM   #4
Sian
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You express yourself really well, there is a lovely flow to this.

Sian
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'I can always kill myself tomorrow, today I shall look for reason to live. Of course, tomorrow never comes ... '

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Old 13-03-2008, 02:31 AM   #5
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damn girl.
this doesn't seem to have the same sound of many of your other poems, don't really know how to describe it, but often what you write would sound incredible even if it was all gibberish and had no meaning.
this makes up for anything it lacks in that area in MEANING. i LOVE every single line of this. i cant even...just every line made me want to read the next, and every completed thought made me smile.
just inspiring



everything's coming up roses.

no more fear. no more fear!


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