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Old 30-11-2007, 09:16 PM   #1
sjhope
 
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Melancholy Sadness

somber colors, sky's a mess of grays,
melancholy sadness, inside a foggy daze,
gloomy horizon, cast over sun's rays

loss full circle, got failure on the brain,
tears are vacant, by overwhelming shame,
time passes by, no increase, no gain

heart beat flutters into a distant lull,
while its' capacity hovers around painful,
and view outside lingers on dingy and dull...

faded landscape, tinted prospects stand,
melancholy sadness, flavor's turned bland,
rainy forecast, within weather's command

overgrown branches, shading blue silence,
chained by emotion, lacking any sense,
imprisoned, behind vines upon melancholy fence...

imprisoned, behind sadness upon melancholy fence...


love some feedback, please...

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Old 04-12-2007, 11:54 PM   #2
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Never knowing...a helping hand or hell to pay?
 
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wow....just. wow.



'Never forget what you are. The rest of the world will not. Wear it like armor, and it can never be used to hurt you.'

['There is only one thing we say to death. Not today'.']

'We are each our own devil, and we make this world our hell.’ – Oscar Wilde
‘It’s hard to dance with the devil on your back.’ Sydney Carter


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Old 05-12-2007, 01:28 AM   #3
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honestly, you guys, thank you so much... it feels so amazing to have one's work be appreciated... :)

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Old 05-12-2007, 02:24 AM   #4
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I like this. Some nice imagery. Praise from me is rare, too, in case you hadn't noticed ;)

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