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Old 31-12-2013, 01:05 AM   #1
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opinions ?!

heyyy i just sat down and wrote this .. to send to my best friend who is in a bad place at the moment .. im not sure if i should send it or not ?
well here it is...

You know I’ll never leave your side
That I promise till the day I die
I will take my love for you to the grave
And whatever happens you must be brave
Loosing you would mean I die
Weather you believe me or just think I’d cry
I love you too much to explain
Baby don’t leave and cause more pain
I need you round to keep me going
Without your smile words mean nothing
You are loved by everyone not just me
You have me, mum, rob, jess and Ashley
There are many more to mention here
But this would take at least a year
Time at the moment is not something we can spare
Hence why I’m jealous that I have to share
It’s not just him it’s the fact times short
And there is nothing I can do the balls in your court..
Like I said I don’t want you to go
as much as i hate it you want me to know ..
you need to go to were you feel safe
Weather its heaven or hell it’s away from this place
you feel as if once you’re gone you can start a fresh up there
But back down here you’ll see everyone cares
All the tears going round will be more than you’ve cried
All the peoples questions just wanting to know why?
Why did she go? What did we do? Could we have helped?
Well it’s too late too..
I love you more than words can say
I’m going to miss you more everyday
I love you so much.

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Old 31-12-2013, 01:14 AM   #2
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Six lines in the Weather should be Whether

Otherwise I think it's up to you as you know her best and how she'll react.
Saying I'm going to miss you more everyday does sound like you're preparing for her to die though which might look like you've given up hope. Maybe "I would miss you more every day'

Just my thoughts :)

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Old 31-12-2013, 10:14 AM   #3
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thanks very much ! x

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Old 03-01-2014, 11:56 AM   #4
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it's really awesome. I think you can post some more.

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Old 06-01-2014, 12:23 AM   #5
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Sounds great, I think your friend would really like it :)



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