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Old 30-10-2009, 04:08 AM   #1
Scars
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Triggering (Suicide) - Suicide Poem

Please comment if you read this...good or bad comments welcome. Give a truthful opinion, Thanks. </3

My Loneseome Suicide Note

I was never enough
I suppose life was too tough
Thats's a lie.
If you could see me cry
You'd know that I was weak.
I'm broken and shattered
To You I never mattered
This might be the best thing I ever wrote,
Oh, lonesome suicide note.

Goodbye is the end,
I'm swallowed in sin
All hope is gone
This might be the best thing I've ever drawn
Oh, lonesome suicide note.

I love you, dear
you never brought me near
I'll miss you mother
I'll miss you father
If you were going to lie to me, don't bother
I leave you with this
Sweeter than a kiss
Oh, lonesome suicide note

Friend that let me live,
this is the last gift that I will give
Oh, lonesome suicide note.
Lover that had my heart
I trusted you from the start
For you:
Oh, lonesome suicide note.
No, you cannot help.
You cannot change the crads that I've been dealt.
Thank you for trying,
but I still feel like dying
For You:
Oh, lonesome suicide note.

It's not your fault.
It's not how I was taught.
I was in pain.
I was full of shame.
I am guilty as sin.
And, that's how my story ends.
Oh, lonesome suicide note.



I hate myself.


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Old 30-10-2009, 02:59 PM   #2
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its really well written. i can totally relate. stay strong keep writing. well done

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Old 30-10-2009, 10:07 PM   #3
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I really like it, very relatable and a wonderfll choice of words. Not to mencion good punctuation. Stay safe, PM me if you need anything. :)

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Old 31-10-2009, 12:45 AM   #4
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Although the emotion is very strong, its kind of unoriginal and typical. When you choose words and phrases for a poem, try to use things that are unique and creative. thanks for sharing.

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Old 28-11-2009, 08:41 AM   #5
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It is amazing, and very strong as well. I can really relate, and hope you feel better!! <3



So many people are looking to me to be strong and to fight, but I'm just surviving.
The mirror can lie...doesn't show you what's inside. It's amazing what you can hide, just by putting on a smile.

Please feel free to PM me if you need to talk... I'll always listen.

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Old 29-11-2009, 10:34 PM   #6
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very strong words and full of pain and emotion<3
i've felt that way before, you're never alone
*hugs*



Everything will be okay in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end.

Tears are no weakness. Sometimes they are the strongest things we have.
Love is the most strongest word.
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Old 01-12-2009, 09:36 AM   #7
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hang in there hun your def not alone



sometimes being strong means not holding back the tears but letting them fall
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Old 02-12-2009, 05:07 PM   #8
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hang in there your NOT alone..i can relate so much...strong emotions. keep writeing it seems to help.

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