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Old 14-10-2009, 11:22 PM   #1
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Possibly Triggering - Hands

5 minute poem. I write a lot of these, decided to submit one. Litterally just wrote straight off the top of my head, so not brilliant. Also, I've lost my Thesaurus :(

Lift me up,
Soft hands on soft hands,
I only need one hand,
I am light, honest,
I will not be a burden,
I promise.

I will not be a burden
.

I will lift you up,
My hands will be stable,
However unstable the rest of me is,
I will hold you securely in an insecure body,
Shaking from strain,
But hidden by a smothering of calm.

That's all I can do,
Pretend to love you when I can't love myself,
But my hands love you,
Honest, they do,
I can support you,
I can kiss you, just like that,
The most simple thing in the world and yet so magical,

I'd give anything for it,
But my hands lie,
My body gives it away,
When you turn your head my smiles fade,
And you noticed - in the corner of your eye when you pretended you weren't watching,
In my eyes; when I tip my head to kiss you.

You see my flaws. I cannot hide them well enough.
But you couldn't deal with it.
So what does this mean?
I know. You know. It's that voice that makes me tired from shutting it out,
I can't shut it out.

It binds me like steel,
I cannot escape.
I do love you, underneath, I hope,
I'm sorry, but my secrets wrap my heart like iron chains,
I'm sorry, but I can never love again.



Conceal me what I am, and be my aid for such disguise as happilly shall become the form of my intent..

...Everybody is somebody else's weirdo.

"we could mix all three, the two gendered and the one non-gendered, "she", "he", and "it", to make "shi...". No, nevermind, that won't work either..."


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Old 15-10-2009, 05:54 PM   #2
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Good Job!
This is really good.

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Old 16-10-2009, 05:24 PM   #3
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5 minute poem. I write a lot of these, decided to submit one. Litterally just wrote straight off the top of my head, so not brilliant. Also, I've lost my Thesaurus :(
^ Really!
Wish I could write poetry that quickly! :P
That was an emotional poem, I thought it was well written and interesting to read. You should post mroe of your 5 minute poems! :D
Oh and I hate it when you can't find a thesaurus too, if that happens I tend to use an online one xD


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Old 17-10-2009, 10:20 PM   #4
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You've got a lot of talant as a poet. This poem was like a soft sigh to me: subtle, sweet, and very sad.

I would love to read more of your poems, thanks for sharing this one

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