I know it's meant as constructive criticism but I have just taken it to heart. They said;
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I love your story, I find it definitely very interesting. Please take this as constructive criticism, the plot development could be tighter, what I mean is that what occurred in the length of 12 chapters could have fitted in less, when the story doesn't progress much from chapter to chapter it becomes disenchanting and dull to the reader even when is in fact very interesting. I would try yo develop the story more profoundly with each chapter so the reader can enjoy the excitement of constant progress throughout every chapter. Other than that I believe this is a wonderful story and I look forward to keep reading.
..and then i'm sitting here and like, is everyone thinking that? Hardly any is reading it any more. I have 578 reads and 7 reviews (in total, but my latest chapter has only had, like 10), which is poor for the site. There is another story with only 4 chapters, yet has had over 1000 reads for the first chapter alone and over 200 reviews.
I was so proud of this as well. Now I don't like it. Now I think it sucks and I want to start again.
DILLIGAF
"it’s when you’re acting selflessly, that you are at your bravest"
- Four.
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No don't start again! What I have read so far it's amazing! Fair enough she has given her thoughts on it and fair enough you have taken it to heart. I know I would have too if it was said about mine. *cuddles you*
I say carry on with it and PROVE HER WRONG! I'm going to read it tomorrow for you hun and let you know what I think.
I really like your story, it's original it has great characters and you can imagine everything you say, which is exactly how you want it to be. =)
It's not bad to combine the chapters together, everything you've written when I have read so far is amazing and you're doing a great job with it. =) Maybe set a target to like write... 2,000 words per chapter? =) I've done that with mine but with 5,000 words per chapter. =)
I'm carrying on to get to 35,000 words. I'm in that writing mode now and I can't stop!
I can't wait to get to 40,000. I really want to get to 50,000 before the end of the week if I can. I can see my story being more than 50,000 words anyway. It's too in depth to stay within that limit.
Then I don't get what she is complaining. =S Urgh I'd ignore her hun, it's only a bit of fun writing, not like you're writing it to be published in weeks time, you know what I mean? But that said I still think it's brilliant!
I can understand why you feel that way hun. *cuddles you* BUT don't let it get you down, you've got a lot further than most people have with it and you've never done something like this before right? Ignore them hun you're doing so well and I'm proud of how well you have done with it these past couple of days!
Mmm something I learnt at uni from taking creative writing was that too much description can slow the storyline down but I don't think you've done too much to be honest. Think you have the right balance going on but everyone is different.
Don't beat yourself up about it hun, seriously. *cuddles* Just learn from what she has said and show her you can BLOODY WELL SHOW HER! XD
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To be honest Amy with NaNoWriMo they say not to give a damn and just write, write, write and worry about all that later on when editing. Do the people know this is for that? If not maybe if they knew it was they would understand more? If that makes sense? =)
Ooo that sounds like a plan! Make sure to show it to us yes? ^_^
I just looked at my word count on the TH website and somehow i've gained 900 words but nothing has been added. what the ****. Do you think the HTML coding would have added to it?
DILLIGAF
"it’s when you’re acting selflessly, that you are at your bravest"
- Four.
♥
I think the combining chapters worked though - I put a note to previous readers saying what I had done and which chapters were combined - and now it has gone up to 608 reads in total.
DILLIGAF
"it’s when you’re acting selflessly, that you are at your bravest"
- Four.
♥
Nope. I was woken up at 12 thanks to the postman, after only been asleep for 6 hours. Then i was just about to go back to sleep and then my flatmate kept knocking on my door wanting me to look at her new clothes. D:
Ooooh that such a good plan! :D
pleaaaaaaaaaaaase read mine if you can? uberly stuck.
DILLIGAF
"it’s when you’re acting selflessly, that you are at your bravest"
- Four.
♥
