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Old 04-12-2014, 06:07 AM   #1
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Personal Piece - Safe - The Best Gift - A Poem Of My True Love

You came to me
wrapped like a present,
Quiet, by the side of the room,
Little did I know,
we'd be talking,
We'd be partners and lovers so soon

The days passed
in orderly fashion,
You wore them like I wear my past,
Patient but ever so
Hidden,
We opened each other at last

It happened when
we first were seeing
Connections we'd made through our eyes,
Confirmed by a song,
was the feeling,
But we both wore a friendly disguise

From that day we grew
Ever-closer,
Though I had a boy in my mind,
I knew that there was
something missing,
I needed a man in my life

My house became home
when you entered,
The second time and in the first,
Though it always returned
to a monster,
For a time, you had sated it's thirst

Just short of a year
had passed quickly,
One day I came in and I cried,
"I'm leaving the boy,
for, I need a man,
Who'll care and will fight by my side"

I knew at that point to
Unwrap you,
And take off your casing and lies,
I knew at that point
I was for you,
And that I had to say a goodbye

You are the best gift
I've gotten,
And I hope I can be of the same,
What you've gifted me with
Is a new chance,
To win in this life of a game

You have been
everything I need,
And everything I've wanted, too,
I hope that I provide
You with solace,
And give all of your love back to you

I love you with
all of my fibers,
And all hearts and souls in me too,
It will never tire me
to say this,
It's timeless to say I love you

You came to me
wrapped like a present,
The best gift I've ever received,
For love is the one thing
I needed,
And now I am loved and relieved



Stay strong. If you need help someone will come. All you need to do is put yourself out there and meet them <3

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Old 04-12-2014, 11:30 PM   #2
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Dont think I am just saying this cause you put something nice on mine cause I really mean it when I say I really really like this!!

It flows nicely, I can almost here your tone throughout the words and the sentiment, particularly in the repeated (but slightly altered) stanza at the end!

Lucky lucky people! left me feeling a bit warmer :)

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Old 05-12-2014, 04:45 AM   #3
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Lol I'm sure! Niceness flows around here like air, and you're a wonderful writer! Thank you so much for your kind words, my goal was to make my love feel warm and fuzzy inside, and I'm glad it works for you and others, too! ^_^



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Old 09-12-2014, 07:49 PM   #4
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I like it!

Really nice!

Thanks for posting it.



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