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Old 08-11-2012, 03:30 PM   #1
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Reviews Requested- Safe - A child that died.

Here she lays, a pretty bud,
Lately made of flesh and blood,
Who as her little eyes did peep?
Give her stewing's, but not stir,
This is the earth that lightly covers her,
I can feel you near my beautiful girl,
Alive and breathing, but where,
It's my mind again,
You're not here,
You're not here,
You're there,
All the way over there from my reach in God's caring arms,
You may not be beside me but you'll always be beside my heart,
For we shall never be emotionally apart,
Me and my beautiful girl,
Forever by my side!

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Old 08-11-2012, 08:12 PM   #2
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Throughout the poem I changed my perception of the subject matter about three times. I like that. I finished off being confused but also understanding the confusion.

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Soon... Now will be then...Today will be yesterday... Present will be past...And thought will be memory... So...Live for the future! Make your future how you want it!

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Old 22-11-2012, 03:41 PM   #3
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aha aww(: thank you for reading it anyway(: x

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Old 22-11-2012, 09:43 PM   #4
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I couldn't give you any literary advice. But I really liked it. <3

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Old 18-12-2012, 11:13 AM   #5
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Aha thank you 'Infinity' glad you liked it <3

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