Reviews Requested (*TW* *SH*) Sharing a poem publicly for the first time
I've had phases of writing poetry throughout my life and finally decided to share some. I'm not really sure how I feel about it...but I hope others enjoy it. I know it's at least cathartic for me to write and pushes me out of my comfort zone to share - even anonymously. Anyways, here goes nothing!
It lands on my tongue.
Daintily, it spreads itself thin.
Torture – this sweet thing of insolence -
It slides through my neck like tumbleweed.
Alone, in a hot dry place
Dancing languidly on a breeze
of exhaled sadness.
Catching on my tonsils
Catching on fire
It burns a hole in my chest and through it
I see shimmering black.
Into my veins black smoke glides
A blistering violation
A combustion of tears.
It begs to be freed
Desperate, clinging to red
blood cells and plasma.
Screaming white fury
I must let it out!
Cacophonous Silence, Whispering Wails
With a slice, it is free and I
Sit silently, listless and afraid.
I hate myself, but I love it.
...Is this kind of stuff ok to post here?