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LadyMacbeth · 20-02-2008, 08:58 PM

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Originally Posted by PaperClip

Criticism - not from me!!

This is really good, cant wait to read some more - there is going to be more isn't there???

I love the way that it doesn't give too much away, i can pick out lil point of her personality already - a great start!

Cant wait for the next installment!

PaperClip!

PM anytime!

Thanks for being so nice. I wasn't sure, there was something about it that was just not right.

I do want to add some more, but am not sure where it should lead, I think I will though.

Thanksies for being so complimentary

20-02-2008, 08:58 PM	#3
LadyMacbeth Jessica or Jess or Jessie or whatever Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: London I am currently:	Quote: Originally Posted by PaperClip Criticism - not from me!! This is really good, cant wait to read some more - there is going to be more isn't there??? I love the way that it doesn't give too much away, i can pick out lil point of her personality already - a great start! Cant wait for the next installment! PaperClip! PM anytime! Thanks for being so nice. I wasn't sure, there was something about it that was just not right. I do want to add some more, but am not sure where it should lead, I think I will though. Thanksies for being so complimentary
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