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I remember when I read version one of this. I thought it was real. You'd written it that well it took me a few chapters to realise it was fiction.
If I hadn't known it was fiction from the start I would have been fooled again. Your skill has improved immensely and it's better than ever.

A note though, try and space it out a little more, makes it easier on the eyes and easier to find your place again if you get lost.

Other than that you should be proud of yourself. you have a wonderful piece of work here.

Edit: Lovely, that spacing out makes the whole thing better. Fantastic!