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Butterfly_red 18-08-2010 05:36 PM

Confusing but intreging - Poem PLEASE COMMENT
 
Field of Mountains

So vast and immense,
My Mountains surround my consciousness.


I dare you to look into these eyes you fear,
Stare down demons, angels and merciful beings.

The pit that never-ends were uncovered and in its deepness,
you saw relics of the past; such beauty in the fallen ones.


However, the eyes you fear are mine.
And never did you realise that having no soul,
I replaced the colour to represent a mirror,
That would finally force you to acknowledge
everything that lies alive in your eyes.


When I shattered inside,
Seven years of bad luck strived against me.
And in my eyes you could see the stone
blooming onto a field until you saw
Mountain peaks and hollow valleys,
emerging from my once-empty glare.

Grrr.... 19-08-2010 05:46 PM

I like this one too. =) Your poetry is great.


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