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Buttons. 12-08-2010 10:32 AM

Sin. *fictional story*
 
Martina Legree sat quietly in her room, back pressed close to the cold wall, head tipped slightly upwards, blowing smoke, silent as a secret into the vent above her. Music thumped in her ears, provided a theatrical back drop to her thoughts. A floor below her the doorbell rang; muffled to her ears by the headphones attached to them.

A young woman who moved with the bowing limbs and shuffling steps of one much her senior moved to open the door, pasting a smile on a face which once upon a time must have been beautiful. Gravelling tones and a familiar face greeted her, and she stood submissively aside to allow her husband entrance to the room. With a groan of relief he sank into a sumptuous armchair, reached for a cigarette and lit it, breathing in deeply and appreciatively. The faded beauty hovered anxiously, waiting for instruction.

‘Whisky Lara, for God’s sake,’ he scolded and she jumped to fetch the order. Arriving again with a tumbler of amber liquid she hesitantly sat on the sofa nearest to him, leaning forward, providing her full and undivided attention. Sip by sip the simmering tension that seemed to hold the man seeped away, leaving a pleasant relaxed smile and a jovial expression. ‘Where’s madam then?’ he asked jokingly, ‘still in the royal bed chamber?’ Lara nodded with a tired smile.

‘Suppose it’s just as well, teenagers should be seen and not heard and all that,’ he laughed, taking a long satisfying gulp of whisky, his smile widening as the liquid trickled down his throat to burn in his chest and belly. Lara laughed and reached for his glass to refill it. ‘I thought I might take you two out for a meal tonight,’ he went on, with the air of Father Christmas pulling a particularly large present out of his sack. ‘Treat both my girls.’ Lara’s eyes brightened and she gazed at her husband with as much love as if he had presented her with the rarest of jewels.

‘I’ll just go fetch Martina,’ she said, rising up, ‘Tell her to get herself straightened up.’ The man nodded his consent and Lara left the room, padding quietly up the stairs until she reached her daughter’s room. Knocking gently she called out ‘Martina? Martina can I come in?’ Deaf to the world Martina did not respond. Sighing Lara gradually pushed open the door, and upon seeing her daughter, cigarette in hand, let out a low, slow sigh. Pulling out her daughter’s head phones she looked upon her with disappointment glistening in her eyes. ‘Martina, we’ve talked about this. What have I said about you smoking? I don’t like it and you know what Jack says about women smoking.’

Martina cloaked her features in disdain to hide the pain it caused her to hurt her mother. ‘Fine,’ she conceded, slowly stubbing out her cigarette before wandering to the window and throwing the butt out. Lara forced a smile, determined to bring the conversation back to a happy topic. ‘Jack’s offered to take us out for a meal tonight, isn’t that nice?’ she said brightly, smoothing the covers of her daughter’s bed. Martina looked blankly back. ‘Is it?’ Lara’s patience snapped.
‘Yes it is,’ bit out Lara ‘And I would have thought you could have been a little more grateful, given what he’s done for us. Who pays for this house, the food on the table,’ she paused, curling her lip in disgust ‘Your filthy cigarettes.’
‘He smokes.’
‘Enough! Now get yourself ready, I expect you presentable and in a darn sight better mood in twenty minutes, you hear?’

Martina nodded; a mutinous look on her face that made her smooth features suddenly quite ugly.
‘Good,’ snapped Lara, exiting the room with a slam of the door. The moment her mother had left her room, Martina crumpled. Feeling the corners of her mouth drag down into a grimace she pinched herself sharply, bringing herself back to reality. Leaving her bed she rummaged through her wardrobe, running her fingers through fabrics, finally selecting a simple black skirt and a silk white shirt that draped nearly long enough to cover the skirt. Dressing quickly she pasted makeup on her face and drew a brush through her poker straight hair.

Once ready she looked herself carefully in the eye, staring at the girl sneering at her from behind the glass in the mirror. With a look of disgust she turned away, and with a deep breath turned and made her way downstairs.

daytonaa1001 12-08-2010 11:14 AM

This is really good :)

Zedebee 12-08-2010 11:44 AM

Ooh I love it. I really like this style of writing. It creates a different vibe to your usual writing style =)

Just Believe. 12-08-2010 01:50 PM

I really like it :)

Left Phalange 12-08-2010 02:30 PM

I really like this :) Like Zed said, much different from your usual type of writing. Plus, with this being fictional, there'll be a guarantee that we won't know what's coming next after every update ;D

By the way, third to bottom paragraph, last word, you put 'here' instead of 'hear', which is what I assume you meant to have put.

Here's some love :D <3

Buttons. 12-08-2010 02:49 PM

^ Thankyou gorgeous, I did indeed mean hear ;-p *is dozy*

I'm pleased you like. Plus there are going to be a fair amount of twists and turns in this one so you definitely won't know what's coming ;-p

It actually interests me that you all like this style because (Zed might remember this) years ago I used to write far more in this style and then sort of moved away from it. I did complete a story when I was little (13/14) in that style if you want it sent to you Nic.

Buttons. 12-08-2010 02:50 PM

*trigger sexual abuse*
 
Now nicely turned out, the family entered a local pub restaurant, smiling at familiar waiters, Jack sharing jokes confidently with the manager as they waited to be seated. Finally led to a table in a prime position each slid into their seat, Martina sitting in the seat furthest away from Jack, eyeing him with undisguised disgust as he scratched at his thick beard and perused the menu. Looking down at her own menu she felt a sudden sickness root itself deep in her belly. She moaned inwardly. Finally deciding upon a light salad which she felt able to force down her throat, she laid the menu down and waited for her mother and step father to finish deciding upon their own dishes.

Eventually, all were ready, and when wines had been selected the three ordered. Settling back in his chair Jack viewed the women before him in a self satisfied manner. ‘So Marty,’ he said, addressing Martina. She glowered into his rotund face. ‘How’s school going at the moment?’
‘College,’ she corrected pedantically, ‘And it’s fine.’
‘Good, good,’ said Jack, either not hearing or choosing not hear the underlying hostility in his step daughter’s tone. ‘And how are those friends of yours?’ He continued. ‘Holly and Marie right?’
‘They’re fine,’ replied Martina, her voice icy. ‘That’s great, they really are cracking girls those two, aren’t they Lara?’ Jack proclaimed, turning to his wife for confirmation. She nodded with a rather strained smile ‘Yes dear, they are, very nice girls.’

Conversation continued thus for another few minutes before the food arrived. Both Jack and Lara immediately dug in, while Martina played with her food, pushing pieces of lettuces around and around her plate with her fork, occasionally nibbling at a morsel. Eventually giving in to her sickening stomach Martina excused herself from the table and tedious small talk and disappeared into the bathroom. There she slammed into a cubicle and fell to her knees, dry heaving until she felt her stomach would force it’s way up through her throat.

Finally establishing that despite her feelings, the contents of her stomach were staying put she opened the cubicle door, bumping into someone as she walked distractedly out into the main bathroom. ‘Oh I’m sorry,’ she said absentmindedly, attempting to move around the figure. It stepped in front her, blocking her escape. ‘No, I am,’ murmured Jack, before bending down to kiss her.

Zedebee 12-08-2010 03:23 PM

I love twists and turns *bounces in seat*
And I do remember *clutches to my copy*

I hope you're not going to keep us waiting too long for the next instalment

Buttons. 12-08-2010 03:27 PM

I just gave you another one!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Zedebee 12-08-2010 03:29 PM

But I need mooore

Buttons. 12-08-2010 03:39 PM

Then tell me what you thought of the second one. Plus I can't write with those Christians yelling about Jesus for the past four hours.

Gone. 12-08-2010 04:17 PM

I like the different writing style, like everyone else.
But I need more now :) *joins Zed in badgering* ;)

Renee NAY 12-08-2010 09:46 PM

I really like this, too =]

xArchAngelx 12-08-2010 11:45 PM

ooo different to your others :) i'm excited
*eagerly awaiting next part*

daytonaa1001 13-08-2010 12:17 PM

Great update, this is gonna be a good story :)

Buttons. 13-08-2010 12:23 PM

Minutes later Martina was picking herself up from the cold, unforgiving bathroom floor, wiping her face clear of smeared mascara, swilling her mouth to rid her tongue of the tang of him. Shaking she returned to the table and poured herself a large glass of wine from the blood red bottle in the centre, taking a heartening swig of the crimson liquid. She ate the rest of her salad in silence, a hardened look on her face, resolve stiffening with every warning glance that Jack shot at her over the place settings, past her mother’s ignorant eyes.

By the time they arrived home, her family high on the evening air with spirits rowdy from drink, Martina’s mind was made up. Never again. After all this time. Never, ever again. Her hands no longer shaking, mind stilled, she walked as though to death row, up to her room. There, methodically, mechanically she packed a bag, filling it with roughened items of clothing, musty and faded with age, anything that she could lay claim to as hers, and not his. Lastly she collected her lighter and a packet of cigarettes, pocketing them. Carefully she ran her fingers over the outline of the packet, feeling for her security. Delicately she crept towards her mother’s room. Winging a prayer to a god she had long since given up on, she checked the drawers.

As she searched she ran her hands over cloth, picking up one jumper and bringing it to her face, breathing her mother in. She found Lara’s makeup and perfumes and scented each wrist, as a reminder.

At last she found what she was looking for. For the second time that evening the girl muttered the word ‘Sorry,’ as she pocketed coin after coin, note after crisp note. Stuffing the money into various pockets she made her way downstairs, breathing hard, avoiding every creaking step.

In the living room her mother and step father sat watching the television, him gripping a whisky like a life raft, her mother nursing a glass of elegant white wine. Without so much as a goodbye, Martina closed the front door with a gasp and the snap of a lock and picked her way carefully down the gravel driveway. Once free of the property she turned to face the house. For a moment she stared, the bright beaming eyes of the building seeming to glare disapprovingly down at her. The brick walls were cold, unfeeling; she would find no sympathy there.

Turning she continued to walk, down one road, then another, then another, mile after mile unravelling behind her like a ribbon. After some time, when the only company Martina found were owls with their painful, piercing screeches, she reached the bus station. Settling her self in a seat with a sigh she waited for her future to unfold.

xArchAngelx 13-08-2010 05:30 PM

:shocked: but, i need to know what happens?
fantastic update though :-)

Bellatrix 13-08-2010 05:37 PM

*sits in thread*

Zedebee 13-08-2010 05:54 PM

Gripping. That's the main word that comes to mind right now. *waits for more*

Buttons. 13-08-2010 09:12 PM

:) More soon.

Buttons. 14-08-2010 05:05 AM

Approximately an hour later Martina could be found, jostled and jumbled on a rickety bus, keeping her hood pressed close to her face, and her face to the window glass, determinedly avoiding the eye contact of the few around her. As she rode she remained shrouded in shadow, lost in thought. She imagined her family’s discovery of her disappearance; Lara’s awful grief, Jack’s terrible anger.

Subtly extracting a bottle from the bottom of her back she took a swig of vodka, a slight smile slipping into place as the alcohol bubbled and burned in her throat before settling in her stomach. Gradually the smile, given that Martina rarely drank, became slightly silly and fixed, as every sensible and distressing thought sidled out of her head, sip by sip.

Finally with a third of the bottle gone she curled up on the seat like a cat before the fire, although she was warmed from the inside out, rather than the outside in. With the scenes around her spinning as though on a merry-go-round (a concept, that in her drunken stupor she found incredibly funny) she finally fell headlong into sleep, the bottle slipping from her fingers, and rolling to the floor.

risenfromperdition 14-08-2010 05:12 AM

*sets up camp* i'd ask for more but you just posted 7 minutes ago ;]

Buttons. 14-08-2010 05:21 AM

Haha yes Heather that would be a little premature.

risenfromperdition 14-08-2010 07:05 AM

:P
was worth a tryyy

Buttons. 16-08-2010 04:58 PM

Half an hour passed with Martina deep in slumber, her face twitching as she slid back into her past in her dreams. Finally the bus driver reached the end of his route and disgruntled at the thought of having to rouse and evict a sleeping drunk from his vehicle he left his seat with a sigh. Once he laid eyes upon the sleeping form however he felt his heart soften. Martina’s closed eyes were underscored with heavy black circles, and even in sleep she crossed her arms close, protective, over her body. Leaning carefully in the bus driver attempted to rouse her, first with his voice, then with a light tap on the shoulder.

At his touch Marina’s eyes flew open, sparkling with surprise. With a yelp of fear as she stood one foot in dreams one in the world she tumbled off her seat, scrambled for her bag and bottle of vodka and pelted off the bus at high speed. Running and running as though the hounds of hell were snapping at her feet she continued until she had put a good mile between her and the man, who in the shadows of the bus had seemed to her, for a moment, to melt and morph into her step father. Finally she let her body collapse against a nearby wall and sank to her knees, breathing hard and fast.

Glancing carefully around her once, twice, three times to check all was clear, she set about searching the alley way for something to protect her against the elements for the night, eventually settling upon a large cardboard box, which to Marina’s tired eyes could have been a five star hotel. Extracting a jumper from her bag she draped it over herself, mindful to keep her legs free, ready to run at the slightest provocation.

With one last beady eyed inspection of her surroundings she again let her eyelids begin to droop, and with a sigh, sank again into slumber, bag clutched close to her side.

Zedebee 16-08-2010 05:06 PM

Love it =)

Buttons. 16-08-2010 05:46 PM

Thankyou :)

when.will.it.end 16-08-2010 07:43 PM

There's more?! Why didn't anyone tell me??!!!

Buttons. 16-08-2010 07:55 PM

Haha sorry, but you are here now that's what matters ;-p

risenfromperdition 17-08-2010 02:54 AM

loveeee it

Anouska 17-08-2010 09:49 PM

Just read this. It is good. Would love to read more xx

Louise 17-08-2010 10:18 PM

enjoyed reading it.

Buttons. 18-08-2010 09:06 AM

Ace :) More coming soon.

Gone. 18-08-2010 11:47 AM

It's really good :) As always.

In the third paragraph, do you mean 'once' and not 'one'?

Just Believe. 19-08-2010 08:59 AM

More? Now? Please? :)

risenfromperdition 20-08-2010 02:16 AM

*copies kirsty* moremoremore *bats eyes*

Crayon, 22-08-2010 10:01 AM

Okay so i'm on the bandwagon for this too :D
I also like this style of writing, why haven't we seen more of this katy its fantastic :)
More now! :D

Buttons. 22-08-2010 05:51 PM

There will be more I'm just trying to get my head together ;-p

Anouska 23-08-2010 12:41 AM

hope your okay babe. take as long as needed xxx

Buttons. 23-08-2010 10:31 AM

The sun rose slowly, spreading itself lazily across the sky. It’s rosy fingers reached out to stroke the tired cheek of Martina Legree, causing her to stir sleepily, slowly stretching stiff limbs. Forcing her eyes open she surveyed her surroundings, her sleep addled brain momentarily disorientated. A sharp sound behind her brought her back to reality with a bump. Whipping round she saw a man staring curiously at her, standing over a bin lid which had fallen from his hand in his surprise.

Dragging herself to her feet with all the dignity she could muster, Martina walked away, slinging her bag over her shoulder as she went. Melting into the crowds on the busy city street beyond the alley she allowed herself to be carried along like salmon in a stream, until she reached an unfamiliar shopping centre. Moving inside she fought her way through the throngs of bustling shoppers, searching out the nearest toilets. 7

Quickly Martina slid into the dimly lit room, slamming the door shut behind her with a sigh of relief. Reaching the sinks she gazed at her hollow eyed reflection as she wiped grime from her cheeks and smoothed her hair, running her fingers through each golden strand, holding it a minute then letting it fall back to her shoulders in strong, curling waves.

Finally satisfied with her bedraggled appearance she hurried from the shopping centre, searching out some small newsagents or similar where she could buy a cheap bar of chocolate for sustenance. Happening upon just such a place she paid for her chocolate hurriedly, ducking her head and avoiding conversing with the friendly newsagent.

Ripping open the wrapper outside she dove on the chocolate as though she hadn’t eaten in months, having burnt up the fuel already inside her body with adrenalin and fear. The chocolate gone in a matter of minutes Martina sat with a thump on a nearby wall. What on earth should she do now? How on earth did you even begin to build a new life when your old one had been ripped apart at the seams?

Fighting back tears Martina scrabbled in her bag, searching manically for a certain item. Finding the jumper she had secreted from her mother’s wardrobe she held it to her face, and finally, finally Martina allowed herself to cry.

Anouska 23-08-2010 12:12 PM

cool update :)

SweetLemonSour 26-08-2010 02:10 PM

Love this!
x

NonExistant~ 27-08-2010 03:18 AM

LOVE, LOVE, LOVE it. I really like you're writing style. It's very delicate. Please continue.

Buttons. 27-08-2010 01:27 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments :)

Wiping away her tears Martina stood up, feeling strangely calm and cleansed. Replacing the jumper in her bag she walked with stiffened resolve through the busy streets. Eventually her eyes lit upon a window filled with pasted job advertisements. Sidling closer she scanned through them, discounting one after the other based on qualifications and experience. Finally her eyes fell on a small piece of note paper near the bottom of the window.

‘Babysitter required to care for two girls, aged 6 and 2 respectively, £4.50 an hour, must be able to work at least 18 hours a week. Contact details below.’

Curious, Martina noted the details down, loving as she did to be around children, this job seemed no less than perfect. Puzzled but pleased by the lack of requests for previous experience Martina rummaged for her mobile phone. Switching it on she delicately typed in the contact number, holding her breath as the phone began to ring.

Moments later a quiet, slightly cold voice answered. ‘Natalie Wilson speaking.’
Martina cleared her throat, forcing her nerves back down into her belly, hoping her voice would remain steady. ‘Hi Mrs Wilson, my name is Martina...’ she paused, realising a false surname might well be necessary to prevent her family from tracking her down. ‘Martina Jones. I’m ringing to, erm, ask about the babysitting job.’ Natalie Wilson’s voice warmed considerably at these words. ‘Oh that’s great; we were beginning to think we wouldn’t get anyone, now if I can just ask you a few questions...’

risenfromperdition 27-08-2010 05:58 PM

katyyyyy i hate cliffhangers *whines at :P*

Zedebee 27-08-2010 06:39 PM

It's beautiful and intriguing and I love it =)

NonExistant~ 28-08-2010 02:38 AM

I love it. Please continue, pretty please. :)

bexidecimal 28-08-2010 04:47 PM

... argh.. i hate joining hreads early on and having to wait like everyone else xD *sets up my tent and roasts some marshmallows handing them out*

SweetLemonSour 28-08-2010 05:49 PM

^^ Me too! *noms marshmallows*
I have cinnamon pop tarts :P

NonExistant~ 28-08-2010 05:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by bexidecimal (Post 2465299)
... argh.. i hate joining hreads early on and having to wait like everyone else xD *sets up my tent and roasts some marshmallows handing them out*

I KNOW! I love starting a thread when it's like 20 pages long. But, this one is well worth it. I like it.


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