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Old 10-09-2011, 03:56 AM   #1
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*graphic* poem i did a while ago

i wrote this poem months ago and i know it off by heart, i did a drawing to go with it in my journal but i'm worried if i scan it my dad or someone will find it, maybe one day i'll add it

I can feel the noose tighten,
it's pulling on my skin
and I know that any minute now I'll give up
and I'll give in.
They will bury down a body
that had died long ago,
and if my soul ends up in hell
I won't even know.
You see pain is just a given,
my body is a cage,
life feels like a lie,
I've grown far beyond my age.

it got kind of graphic after that so i scribbled out the rest, i know it's depressing, sorry about that. If you like it I might post some more of my stuff, i don't know if i have the confidence but i'll see.



they don't get it i wanna scream
i wanna breathe again
i wanna dream

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Old 10-09-2011, 08:46 AM   #2
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It does have a rather dark tone to it. But I like it. To me, it wraps everything up perfectly. I personally, would love to read more of your stuff if you ever feel like posting. ^_^ Don't doubt yourself, I believe with the right motivation and determination you could be a really amazing writer. [=



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Old 05-10-2011, 12:01 AM   #3
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wow thankyou! I'll give it a go :)



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Old 06-10-2011, 06:01 PM   #4
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I'm reading behind the words and can feel it, its really good, you can picture how your feeling, I like it



The worst thing about depression — the thing that makes people phobic about it — is that it’s a foretaste of death. It’s a trip to the country of nothingness. Reality loses its substance and becomes ghostly, transparent, unbelievable. This perception of what’s outside infects the perception of the self, which explains why depressed people feel they aren’t “there.” -Chase Twichell

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