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Old 09-10-2007, 12:12 AM   #1
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Triggering (Suicide) - a poem called something

she lies down with her head on the pillow
down her cheek rolls a single tear
she doesn't think that she could feel more low
theres music in the background, but she doesnt really hear
and as death comes, shes reaching the brink
a couple minutes left and soon she'll be gone
and shes lies there alone and just thinks
whether what she has done is it right or wrong?

whilst many miles away a boy sits at home
after learning of this girls recent lack of time
and at this moment hes feels so alone
so to help him to forget he makes up a rhyme
and while he writes he starts to grieve
and he can't help but think what the future will bring
as he sits alone in the world the girl will now leave

as final thought go through her head
she knows there are people she had yet to meet
she knows that soon, she will be dead
and she starts to shiver as her body looses heat
her eyes start to close and the end is so near
she starts to go limp as she takes her last breath
she finally thinks of the things she holds dear
and she reaches for freedom in the arms of death

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Old 09-10-2007, 09:50 PM   #2
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That's a great poem, it's sometimes hard to interpret somebody else's work but I feel a connection too. Thanks for posting, hope it helped you to let go of some feeling, take care.

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Old 09-10-2007, 10:25 PM   #3
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beautifully written again xxxx

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Old 10-10-2007, 03:05 AM   #4
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This poem...made me cry...All I can say...is that..its the only poem I've ever read thats done that. Its...there aren't words to describe it.



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Old 12-10-2007, 11:34 AM   #5
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not sure what to say, really, how to say how that made me feel... can't explain? but so finely crafted and ...powerful...

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