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Old 25-08-2017, 04:07 PM   #1
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sabotage as a narrative (attempt at poetry)

High, higher than hope --
incandescent, hips swaying
all languorous like poetry, like
music, to the rhythm of my soul's
fervent exclamations.

Intoxication so sharp and
pure it renders me incoherent,
ravages me to gasping;
all eloquence sabotaged, pretty-pretty words
hindered by stitched lips
(This is how time scars us:
what wounds it leaves stand as signposts,
mementos, grave markers for our innocence;
monuments to every
agony
that failed to pass my lips.)

"How do you spell sabotage?"
I don't -- I can't.
How does one spell sabotage
whose native tongue is silence?







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Old 30-08-2017, 12:58 PM   #2
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Nice! I particularly like the imagery and descriptive language that you've used :)



We’ll find a way to fight it, we always have.
It's not how tragically we suffer but how miraculously we live.


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Old 12-09-2017, 05:12 PM   #3
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Thank you very much! I feel like I I've been in a poetic rut lately; I really appreciate the feedback. :)







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