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Old 24-06-2017, 07:41 AM   #1
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My not soo good poem

I have no clue how to make a poem, but whatever.

The stars are shining.
The leaves.
Falling.
The cold winter wind has no mercy.
It keeps killing my leaves.
One by one.
Falling apart.
Crushing my heart.

I can't breathe in this void.
What is right?
What is wrong?
Am I myself?

Please let me see.
The true meaning of my existence.
Before my leaves are no more.


Last edited by Miravela : 24-06-2017 at 07:43 AM. Reason: I hate you mispelling! >:c
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Old 27-07-2017, 10:28 AM   #2
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I like it! I especially like your use of short sentences :)



We’ll find a way to fight it, we always have.
It's not how tragically we suffer but how miraculously we live.


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Old 10-04-2018, 03:48 AM   #3
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Who understands the reason of your behaviour?
Loving and friendly looks that turn into disgust.
Hugs becoming distrust.
"I want you", but far away.

You don't seem to understand, therefore

Yelling from far away I hear your "I want you".
You start trusting and giving hugs.
Looks of disgust turn into loving and friendly.
Who understands the reason of your behaviour?

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Read from top to bottom, then bottom to top. Also tried my best to translate it from spanish becouse i wrote it like that :c

¿Quien entiende la razón de tu comportamiento?
Miradas cariñosas y amables que se transforman en desprecio y desagrado.
Abrazos que se convierten en rechazo.
Un "Te quiero", pero lejos.

Tu tampoco lo entiendes, así que.

Te acercas desde lo lejos para decir "Te quiero".
Comienzas a aceptar, y dar abrazos.
Miradas de desprecio y desagrado que se transforman en cariñosas y amables.
¿Quien entiende la razón de tu comportamiento?

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Old 06-06-2018, 09:30 PM   #4
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the falling of leaves is the best part in terms of imagery

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Old 12-11-2018, 01:56 AM   #5
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Without being able to say a word
I see you walk away and get out of my reach.
No matter how loud i say it, you won't come back.
I had soo many things to say when i could yet i didn't.

Becouse of your distant eyes
I felt alone without a home.
It made me hesistate to whether to come back from work or not.
But I sitll came back pretending it was fine, hoping that it eventually be alright.

I don't know when this eternal winter will end, or the memory of your soothing sweet biterness of smell will go away.
Please leave me alone, for all i want is to build my own home.

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Old 20-01-2019, 08:21 AM   #6
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YOU'RE GOOD!!!!!!!!

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Old 26-02-2019, 01:04 AM   #7
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ty >-<

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Old 03-03-2019, 03:09 PM   #8
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I find your style interesting :)



'Never forget what you are. The rest of the world will not. Wear it like armor, and it can never be used to hurt you.'

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Old 03-04-2019, 03:53 AM   #9
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Sweet bitter stray cat.
When will you stop leaving this sour taste in my mind?
Why wasn't it enough when you destroyed the last lilies i had?

Bitter sweet stray cat.
Why did i have to pick you up?
Wasn't it enough with the previous 3 i had?

Bitter stray cat.
Would all of this have happend if i hadn't spoken up?
Could you please, not come back?

Sweet lilies i had.
I promise i'll hit the strings once more
So you dont have to cry.

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Old 23-04-2019, 05:08 AM   #10
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I really like your style, it's quirky and good quality and makes you think



'Never forget what you are. The rest of the world will not. Wear it like armor, and it can never be used to hurt you.'

[''There is only one thing we say to death. Not today'.']

'I wish I was the monster you think I am.'


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Old 24-04-2019, 03:51 AM   #11
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Thank you >-< i keep struggling to find something to write about and how to write it :(

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Old 24-04-2019, 07:35 AM   #12
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My advice would be don't overthink it for a start and also you can find inspiration anywhere so long as you pay mindful attention to your surroundings, your experiences, people you care for or even strangers for example you could be walking along and notice how blue the sky is that day, then you can start to imagine being in that blue sky flying and what you might see there-birds migrating planes etc. Hope that makes some sort of sense.



'Never forget what you are. The rest of the world will not. Wear it like armor, and it can never be used to hurt you.'

[''There is only one thing we say to death. Not today'.']

'I wish I was the monster you think I am.'


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Old 24-04-2019, 08:31 PM   #13
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It did, i'll try it c: thanks

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Old 25-04-2019, 07:21 AM   #14
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No problem lovely :)



'Never forget what you are. The rest of the world will not. Wear it like armor, and it can never be used to hurt you.'

[''There is only one thing we say to death. Not today'.']

'I wish I was the monster you think I am.'


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