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Old 24-03-2012, 08:09 AM   #1
TheQuietOnexx
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Reviews Requested- Contains upsetting material - some new poems..

What i've done with these poems is taken a line from a song and made the poems around the line.. what do you think?

If only I could tell you.
I’m so glad to see you well,
Really? Can’t you hear me yell?
I’m better? That’s just your view,
Cuz I’m not, if only you knew.
It’s real the thoughts, panic and fear,
But that laugh is fake isn’t that clear?
I can’t tell you, it’s too much for you,
You think you get it, but you have no clue.
Things are getting to be way too hard,
But it’s too hard to let down my guard.



Don’t judge.
Do you have any idea what it’s like when the blade makes you feel alive?
To you it’s all just for attention, but for me it’s how I survive.
You think it’s just a game I play, to feel alive, that’s what I need.
Would it make you feel better, to watch me while I bleed?
Don’t judge, you have no idea; you’ve never stood with that blade.
Fallen so far to that last resort, what happens next? I’m so afraid.



How much can you see?
I feel your presence just there; please don’t stand so close to me,
You keep staring through me and I’m afraid of what you’ll see.
Can you hear my thoughts about how I want to cut a vein?
This is all too much; I’m having trouble breathing again.
You’re still staring; can you see the pain behind my eyes?
You seem disgusted, does that mean you see through my lies?
Part of me somewhere hopes that you can see right through.
Maybe somehow you’ll save me? If only you knew.

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Crazy isn't being broken or swallowing a dark secret. it's you or me, Amplified.

~ R.I.P. Daddy ~

you have a choice. live or die. every breath is a choice. every minute is a choice. to be or not to be.


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Old 27-03-2012, 03:11 AM   #2
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I like what you've done and then created ~ great idea lovely. x

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