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Old 20-03-2014, 01:17 PM   #1
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Reviews Requested- Safe - poem- redone

so I posted a short poem the other week and some said I should add more. so here is more, it is still short but it is more :)

Struggling to make a sound
struggling to stop falling down,
People pass without a care.
Hatred constantly filling the air.
Memories of a past just gone,
Now dictate what I have become.

Constantly in my way,
These broken memories lead me astray.
I look for help but I cannot see
Any of the light that shines near me.

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Old 21-03-2014, 12:41 AM   #2
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i like it a lot but i feel that it isn't finished. i know u have added more but i feel it still doesn't have an ending. that's just my personal opinion. good work :)

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