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Old 23-08-2014, 04:59 PM   #1
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My name is Scandinavian
my mother is underground
& I got
no dad to tell you about

I got a TV inside my head
and the remote
belongs to the unfleshed

They speak and they sing
They tell jokes
and they drink rum
They worship the Moon and curse the Sun

So I draw the curtains

The scent of tobacco fills the air
coloring the room a dreadful grey
while they press their faces
against the veil

I am surrounded
Cradled
Hollowed out

I look down
at the gaping mouth
beneath my soles
It starts licking my toes
and engulfing me whole

I descend
slowly

The chorus becomes louder
The eyes are keen
And now I am nothing
but a heap of skin





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Old 24-08-2014, 03:59 AM   #2
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I like this a lot; it engages the senses... touch, sight, smell, sound. My favorite is the third and seventh stanza.

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Old 25-08-2014, 10:00 PM   #3
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I freaking love this poem! First line got me immediately!

The whole thing is just amazing! I really love it.

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Old 26-08-2014, 04:32 AM   #4
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thank you! thanks for reading it :)





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